作业帮英语作文 青青草老师
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Dear editor
Recently I have made a survey about how middle school students spend their summer holidays. The results are as follow…
They were divided into three parts. First, the 70% of the students who have to learn from private teachers at home or attend various training courses. Second, on the contrary, there are the 18% of the students who find happiness in their holidays, spending their vacation with their grandparents and making new friends. Third, the 9% of students think their holiday boring and feel lonely, these result in they are not allowed to get out so they play computer games all day.
There are some advice I want tell our parents . Parents should encourage the kids to take part in social activity so as to make their vacation more colorful. 请老师评改细一些 辛苦了 谢谢
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Dear editor Recently I have made a survey about how middle school students spend their summer holidays. The results are as follow…（改为follows） They were divided into three parts. First, the 70% of the students who have to learn from private teachers at home or attend various training courses. Second, on the contrary, there are the 18% of the students who find happiness in their holidays, spending their vacation with their grandparents and making new friends. Third, the 9% of students think their holiday boring and feel lonely, these result in they are not allowed to get out so they play computer games all day. 1、 百分比前面不加the，以下的百分比前都同理，去掉the。 2、 Who在这里应该是引导定语从句的，但是这个句子只有一个谓语，因此，不需要从句，去掉who。 3、 你的过渡词用的不够准确，这是3个百分比，用first、second、不合适。此处尤其与on the contrary 重复使用。因此，建议去掉first和second以及third。 4、 此处的who同第2个点，也是连词多余，去掉who。 5、 语句不通，改成because就行。呵呵 There are some advice I want tell our parents . Parents should encourage the kids to take part in social activity so as to make their vacation more colorful. 1、 want + to do，所以改为want to tell 2、 全文内容充实，结构合理，用词准确。个别注意连词的作用和过渡词的正确使用。
谢谢你对老师的信任！如对本题解答还有疑问，可在“继续讨论”中留言，我收到后会尽快给你答复。谢谢你的配合！匆忙中难免有疏漏，请多包涵哦。我是菁菁草老师，随时为你答疑解惑!
最终答案：略
解题过程：
Dear editor Recently I have made a survey about how middle school students spend their summer holidays. The results are as follow…（改为follows） They were divided into three parts. First, the 70% of the students who have to learn from private teachers at home or attend various training courses. Second, on the contrary, there are the 18% of the students who find happiness in their holidays, spending their vacation with their grandparents and making new friends. Third, the 9% of students think their holiday boring and feel lonely, these result in they are not allowed to get out so they play computer games all day. 1、 百分比前面不加the，以下的百分比前都同理，去掉the。 2、 Who在这里应该是引导定语从句的，但是这个句子只有一个谓语，因此，不需要从句，去掉who。 3、 你的过渡词用的不够准确，这是3个百分比，用first、second、不合适。此处尤其与on the contrary 重复使用。因此，建议去掉first和second以及third。 4、 此处的who同第2个点，也是连词多余，去掉who。 5、 语句不通，改成because就行。呵呵 There are some advice I want tell our parents . Parents should encourage the kids to take part in social activity so as to make their vacation more colorful. 1、 want + to do，所以改为want to tell 2、 全文内容充实，结构合理，用词准确。个别注意连词的作用和过渡词的正确使用。
谢谢你对老师的信任！如对本题解答还有疑问，可在“继续讨论”中留言，我收到后会尽快给你答复。谢谢你的配合！匆忙中难免有疏漏，请多包涵哦。我是菁菁草老师，随时为你答疑解惑!
最终答案：略