作业帮修改作文(作文修改)
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书面表达（满分20分） 假如你叫王宾，要报名参加你校的英语俱乐部，成为高一新会员。请根据提示信息，完成报名表中的“自我介绍”部分，并选择其中1－2点，举例说明。要求意思连贯、内容清楚，词数不少于60。
提示信息 he active in English class
take part in many activities about English learning
join the English summer camp
stay in touch with an American pen pat
Personal Information
Family Name:Wang
Given Name:Bin
Date of Birth:July 12,1992
Birth Place:Xicheng District, Beijing
Sex: Male
Telephone:(010)62771234
E-mail:WangBin@ sohu. com
Self-introduction I’m an outgoing boy and like English very much . I’m active in English class in order to show my English ability . I was born on July 12,1992 and I was born in Xicheng District , Beijing .I have learn English eight years and I’m interested in English so I want to join the English club . In the club I can meet some new friends . We can solve problem together . And I am now staying in touch with an American pen pale . We often send letters to each other so that I can improve my English . She told me that she will come to Beijing this winter vocation . She is one of my best friends . If you have something to tell me. You can call (010)62771234 and my E-mail address is WangBin @ sohu. com. I wish I can become a member of you and have a good time in the English club. 请问我这篇能得多少分？还能怎样改？还能再提高多少分？
提示信息 he active in English class
take part in many activities about English learning
join the English summer camp
stay in touch with an American pen pat
Personal Information
Family Name:Wang
Given Name:Bin
Date of Birth:July 12,1992
Birth Place:Xicheng District, Beijing
Sex: Male
Telephone:(010)62771234
E-mail:WangBin@ sohu. com
Self-introduction I’m an outgoing boy and like English very much . I’m active in English class in order to show my English ability . I was born on July 12,1992 and I was born in Xicheng District , Beijing .I have learn English eight years and I’m interested in English so I want to join the English club . In the club I can meet some new friends . We can solve problem together . And I am now staying in touch with an American pen pale . We often send letters to each other so that I can improve my English . She told me that she will come to Beijing this winter vocation . She is one of my best friends . If you have something to tell me. You can call (010)62771234 and my E-mail address is WangBin @ sohu. com. I wish I can become a member of you and have a good time in the English club. 请问我这篇能得多少分？还能怎样改？还能再提高多少分？
解题思路： 作文修改
解题过程：
I’m an outgoing boy and like English very much . I’m active in English class in order to show my English ability . I was born on July 12,1992 in Xicheng District , Beijing.I have learned English for eight years. I want to join your English club . In the club I can meet some new friends . I can solve problems with them . I am now staying in touch with an American pen pale . We often send letters to each other so that I can improve my English . She told me that she would come to Beijing this winter vocation . She is one of my best friends . I wish I can become a member of you and have a good time in the English club. I am looking forward to you reply. You can call me by(010)62771234 and my E-mail address is WangBin @ sohu. com. 因为这是一封申请信所以要注意一些相关的格式和称呼。句中的自我介绍部分基本表达到位，但是其中出现了一些句法方面的错误。文章后半部分不符合申请的格式和内容要求。按照老师的修改应该更适合文体的要求。 这篇作文可以给12分 以后自己写作文时候要根据文体的要求注意内容和语气。并且要在写作时注意语言的简洁和时态的一致。平时多注意看一些相关的范文多注意总结。 很高兴为你解答，如有疑问请继续讨论
最终答案：略
解题过程：
I’m an outgoing boy and like English very much . I’m active in English class in order to show my English ability . I was born on July 12,1992 in Xicheng District , Beijing.I have learned English for eight years. I want to join your English club . In the club I can meet some new friends . I can solve problems with them . I am now staying in touch with an American pen pale . We often send letters to each other so that I can improve my English . She told me that she would come to Beijing this winter vocation . She is one of my best friends . I wish I can become a member of you and have a good time in the English club. I am looking forward to you reply. You can call me by(010)62771234 and my E-mail address is WangBin @ sohu. com. 因为这是一封申请信所以要注意一些相关的格式和称呼。句中的自我介绍部分基本表达到位，但是其中出现了一些句法方面的错误。文章后半部分不符合申请的格式和内容要求。按照老师的修改应该更适合文体的要求。 这篇作文可以给12分 以后自己写作文时候要根据文体的要求注意内容和语气。并且要在写作时注意语言的简洁和时态的一致。平时多注意看一些相关的范文多注意总结。 很高兴为你解答，如有疑问请继续讨论
最终答案：略