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(1)Walt Disney Walt Disney is the father of Disneyland and also one of the most motion-picture and movie producer. He was born in Chicago in 1901. He spent his boyhood in the farm and he was famous for cartoon characters , such as Mickey Mouse, Donald Duck, Snow White and so on. In 1955, he made the first Disney theme park in the world. Walt Disney was died of lung cancer in December 15th, 1966. (2) Hi! I’m a boy from London, England. I’m looking for penfriend to share information and ideas. I’m 12 years old and enjoy reading, learning languages and playing football. I can speak and write English and French. You can write to me, my e-mail address is Jimmy@hotmail.com. Best wishes 请老师将语法错误，用词不当的地方用红笔标明，并告诉我如何改正。谢谢！
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Walt Disney
Walt Disney is the father of Disneyland and also one of the most motion-pictures and movie producers. He was born in Chicago in 1901. He spent his boyhood on the farm and he was famous for cartoon characters , such as Mickey Mouse, Donald Duck, Snow White and so on. In 1955, he made the first Disney theme park in the world. Walt Disney died of lung cancer on December 15th, 1966
the most motion-pictures and movie producers这句话有问题，但我不知道你要表达什么意思，
Hi! I’m a boy from London, England. I’m looking for a penfriend to share information and ideas. I’m 12 years old and enjoy reading, learning languages and playing football. I can speak and write English and French. You can write to me and my e-mail address is Jimmy@hotmail.com.
Best wishes
最终答案：略
解题过程：
Walt Disney
Walt Disney is the father of Disneyland and also one of the most motion-pictures and movie producers. He was born in Chicago in 1901. He spent his boyhood on the farm and he was famous for cartoon characters , such as Mickey Mouse, Donald Duck, Snow White and so on. In 1955, he made the first Disney theme park in the world. Walt Disney died of lung cancer on December 15th, 1966
the most motion-pictures and movie producers这句话有问题，但我不知道你要表达什么意思，
Hi! I’m a boy from London, England. I’m looking for a penfriend to share information and ideas. I’m 12 years old and enjoy reading, learning languages and playing football. I can speak and write English and French. You can write to me and my e-mail address is Jimmy@hotmail.com.
Best wishes
最终答案：略