以下是我的作文,希望有经验的高手帮改下,最好能打个分数,

以下是我的作文,希望有经验的高手帮改下,最好能打个分数,
Improing living condition or the research in outspace,which one shold be invested in a larger sum of money by the goverment?Different people have different idea.Personally speaking I agree with the former.
Although the reseach in outsspace can bring many metits to us.Such as people can carry the seeds into outspace and grain new varieties; more and more scientists pay attention to explore the new living space.There is no evident to suggest the reseach shoule be invested more money than improving the living condition.What`s more the research involves incredible sum of money not only in terms of scientific facilities,but also in terms of researchers.Similarly it has been said the research also bring enomous pressure to the goverment,which often lead to the financial burdern.To be sure the goverment should pay more money to change the living conditiong.
The another reason why i personally dispute the statement abouve is that no one can deny that living condition which is gradually become serious is the most important to the hunman being.Fact shows that no matter the developed and developing countries all threated by the poverty and disease.According to the newspaper the number of people who died from poverty and disease such as cancer is experiencing a slightly rise these years.As a result survive is foundation of any other things,therefore it is higly important that goverment invest larger money in improving living condition.
AS has been mentioned above that survvive is most inmportant to us.Ican come to the conclusion that the goverment should give more money on improving our living condition

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