关于“Occupy Wall Street” 的随想.麻烦帮忙改改.

关于“Occupy Wall Street” 的随想.麻烦帮忙改改.
The 99% are Calling for Help
As we all know that “Occupy Wall Street” is an ongoing series of protests which criticizing social and economic inequality and calling for help.The slogan “We are the 99%” strongly demonstrates that the majority of people are living in the abyss of suffering,because it becomes more and more difficult for them to make a living.
The top 1%,who control about 40% of the wealth,should be firstly blamed.How can they be so greedy and wicked that they have been quickening the pace of financial meltdown?As the gap between the rich and the poor becomes wider and wider,the wealthiest 1% should pay more taxes,pay more wages for the employees,and attach more attention on charities.
Meanwhile,the government is responsible for their corruption and excessive influence of big business,which profit the rich,but bring hardship to the rest’s livelihood.It’s no doubt that reducing unemployment is desperately demanded.The frustrations of the American people feel should have warned the government that the institutions aren’t looking out for most of them and the financial system needs to be reformed.If the government don’t take action to improve the harsh economic situation,they will lose the hearts and minds of many of its own people.
Attention!The 99% are calling for help!Do something please,the 1% and the government!Only the more people live a happy life,can the society becomes more harmonious and stable.

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