作业帮请高手帮我改改这封自荐信
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请高手帮我改改这封自荐信
Please write briefly in English on your reasons for applying to study at The University of Hong Kong,outlining the curricula which you are interested in,your career aspirations and any other information you consider relevant.(within 250 words)
请用英文简述报读香港大学的原因,选择志愿的考虑及对未来的展望或其他相关的资料.(250字内)
I’m a student fromxxx.During my staying on campus,I try my best to pursue my dream.With the passion for study,I won the school’s scholarship every year and the third prize ofxxx.What’s more,I’m not a nerd.My school life was rich and varied.I took active part in many extracurricular activities.For example,as a member of The Tongxin charity,where I learned to cherish and love,I assisted the children in studying.
As a student of science,I believe HKU will be my best choice.I want to major in biology or math in the Bachelor of Science course.The reasons are as follows.
HKU’s international conditions and extroardinary teaching ideas could become a bridge between me and the world.I can make many good friends who come from all sides of the world.Furthermore,I will have a chance to study further aboard.
I have a dream of becoming a scientist.Last summer holiday,I have a chance to join a camp hosted by thexxx.I learned that most of the excellent students show no interest in becoming a scientist.I know that those who major in scientific theories will have a hard time to find a job.But I still believe and hope that if HKU give me a chance,she will witness my success.
Thanks for your reading.
Please write briefly in English on your reasons for applying to study at The University of Hong Kong,outlining the curricula which you are interested in,your career aspirations and any other information you consider relevant.(within 250 words)
请用英文简述报读香港大学的原因,选择志愿的考虑及对未来的展望或其他相关的资料.(250字内)
I’m a student fromxxx.During my staying on campus,I try my best to pursue my dream.With the passion for study,I won the school’s scholarship every year and the third prize ofxxx.What’s more,I’m not a nerd.My school life was rich and varied.I took active part in many extracurricular activities.For example,as a member of The Tongxin charity,where I learned to cherish and love,I assisted the children in studying.
As a student of science,I believe HKU will be my best choice.I want to major in biology or math in the Bachelor of Science course.The reasons are as follows.
HKU’s international conditions and extroardinary teaching ideas could become a bridge between me and the world.I can make many good friends who come from all sides of the world.Furthermore,I will have a chance to study further aboard.
I have a dream of becoming a scientist.Last summer holiday,I have a chance to join a camp hosted by thexxx.I learned that most of the excellent students show no interest in becoming a scientist.I know that those who major in scientific theories will have a hard time to find a job.But I still believe and hope that if HKU give me a chance,she will witness my success.
Thanks for your reading.
你一定是位优秀的中学生吧?我只在你的原文上作些基本的修改,并忍不住就内容提了两点建议,无意多管闲事,只希望有点帮助.不对的话请忽略.
另外,请特别注意时态的使用.我因为不清楚你的原始表达意图,不便作太多修改.
Good luck with your application.
I’m a student from xxx. During my stay on campus, I try my best to pursue my dream. With a passion for study, I won the school’s scholarship (sholarship会让人误认为是助学金之类,我想你要说的是得奖,最好用awards of excellence) every year and the third prize ofxxx. What’s more, I’m not a nerd. I led a rich and diverse school life. I took active part in many extracurricular activities. For example, as a member of The Tongxin Charity, where I learned to cherish and to love, I assisted the children with their studies.
As a student of science, I believe HKU will be my best choice. I hope to major in biology or math in my undergraduate study. The reasons are as follows.
HKU’s international academic atmosphere and extroardinary teaching ideas could be a bridge between me and the world. I will be able to know people from all around the world. Furthermore,I will have a chance to study further aboard. (以后有出国留学的机会?这可不是去某个学校读书的好动机,个人认为这一点不宜提及.)
I have a dream of becoming a scientist. During last summer vacation, I had a chance to join a camp hosted by thexxx.I learned that most of the excellent students showed no interest in becoming a scientist. I know that those who major in scientific theories will have a hard time finding a job. (So, why do you have a different dream?) But I still believe and hope that if HKU give me a chance, she will witness my success.
Thanks for your reading.
另外,请特别注意时态的使用.我因为不清楚你的原始表达意图,不便作太多修改.
Good luck with your application.
I’m a student from xxx. During my stay on campus, I try my best to pursue my dream. With a passion for study, I won the school’s scholarship (sholarship会让人误认为是助学金之类,我想你要说的是得奖,最好用awards of excellence) every year and the third prize ofxxx. What’s more, I’m not a nerd. I led a rich and diverse school life. I took active part in many extracurricular activities. For example, as a member of The Tongxin Charity, where I learned to cherish and to love, I assisted the children with their studies.
As a student of science, I believe HKU will be my best choice. I hope to major in biology or math in my undergraduate study. The reasons are as follows.
HKU’s international academic atmosphere and extroardinary teaching ideas could be a bridge between me and the world. I will be able to know people from all around the world. Furthermore,I will have a chance to study further aboard. (以后有出国留学的机会?这可不是去某个学校读书的好动机,个人认为这一点不宜提及.)
I have a dream of becoming a scientist. During last summer vacation, I had a chance to join a camp hosted by thexxx.I learned that most of the excellent students showed no interest in becoming a scientist. I know that those who major in scientific theories will have a hard time finding a job. (So, why do you have a different dream?) But I still believe and hope that if HKU give me a chance, she will witness my success.
Thanks for your reading.