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麻烦哪位大神帮我改一下这几句英语里的
I wish I could be on my own after my graduation,but reality tells me it is out of the question for a young man who just get a job to pay all the cost of living.I will be out of my salary to pay for the rent and every kind of fee.As a matter of fact,although you have worked for several years,you are not able to offer a house.By and large,when a young couple gets marry,their parents will give them several money to buy a house or buy a house for them.
Living independent is impossible when facing the fact that a man could only be able to afford basic requriment of survival.House rent and other fees take away the salary from the pocket,which makes buying a house not practical.In general,parents will prepare house for married young couples.
我也不知道我改的行不行= =,可能会有拼写错误之类的.但是我想说兄弟,给你几点建议……
写这种东西就忌讳前面是I,后面又变成you.统一,人称必需统一.
写东西不要开通就是I wish,I want to ,I 如何如何的,太掉价= =.
少用简单句= =