这篇英语作文有语法错误吗 打了半天 求帮我看看 Dear Tim How are you doin

这篇英语作文有语法错误吗 打了半天 求帮我看看 Dear Tim How are you doin
这篇英语作文有语法错误吗 打了半天 求帮我看看
Dear Tim
How are you doing?
It is good news for me that you will come to China in middle of July.In that Case I can see you
I'm fine.High school study life is very tired,but I have a lot of harvest I have made a big progress My progress in study was such as to please my present.Only by studying hard now ,can we have a bright future.
If you get opportunity to my city,I am honored to show you my hometown Oh it's a quiet and beautiful city I think you will like it.
I hope that someday maybe you will be able to visit my family

语法有一些小细节的错误.我给你改在下面.
Dear Tim
How are you doing?
It is good news for me that you will come to China in middle of July.In that Case I can see you
I'm fine.
第一句当中,如果你这是一篇考试作文,那么格式上,语法上就必须有严格的要求：
It is a good news for both you and me that you will come to China in the middle of July.( news 是可数名词,you and me,不是 me and you,要把自己放在后面,表示尊敬） In that case,意思是如果那样的话.这里不是很清楚你想表达的意思.是不是“ In that case I will be so glad to meet you",想表达很期望能够见到Tim.
High school study life is very tired,but I have a lot of harvest I have made a big progress
High school study life is very tiring,but I have a lot of harvets that I have made a big progress.这里 tired 是表示人的情绪,tiring是表示事物,高校生活是事物.harvest表示收获的时候是可数名词.
My progress in study was such as to please my present.这里was 改成is,整体为一般现在时.My progress in study is such as to please me presently.让我现在很愉悦,这样表述更好.
Only by studying hard now ,can we have a bright future.逗号去掉.
If you get opportunity to my city,I am honored to show you my hometown Oh it's a quiet and beautiful city I think you will like it.
If you get the opportunity to my city,it will be honored to show you my hometown.Oh,it is a quiet and beautiful city.I think you will like it.If 从句表虚拟语气是,主句用一般将来时.
I hope that someday maybe you will be able to visit my family
I hope that you will be able to visit my family someday maybe.把表示时间状语的成分放在句子后面.
总体建议,语法上面的问题改完了,不过整体文章通过翻译成中文,在逻辑上还是存在一定的问题,希望你可以仔细检查一下.有什么疑问,
希望我的回答对你有所帮助.
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