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I want to smile

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老师您好,给出分数,和个别您表达的句子,谢谢 I want to smile It’ known to us all that the smile has many advantages. Not only do smile make us happy, but also please other. So I want to smile at all whenever and wherever possible.
For one thing , I would like to smile at my parents. What make me do this is that they gave me life. And they brought me up with many troubles. During my growing up, they help me overcome difficulties and support me at any time. So I want to thanks them with a smile. For another thing , I feel like smiling at myself. As smiling can help me get confidence to meet new challenges.
In a word , it’s no use complaining everything, why not try to smile. Tomorrow is another day.
解题思路: 文章条理清晰,观点明确,语言比较流畅文章结构合理,层次清晰,句间连接成分使用较好, 能够使用较复杂的语法结构。
解题过程:
I want to smile It's known to us all that smiling has many advantages. Not only does smiling make us happy, but also pleases others. So I want to smile at all whenever and wherever possible.
For one thing , I would like to smile at my parents. What makes me do (this去掉) is that they gave me life. And they take all the trouble to bring me up . During my growth , they help me overcome difficulties and support me at any time. So I want to thank them with a smile. For another thing , I feel like smiling at myself. As smiling can help me get confidence to meet new challenges.
In a word , it’s no use complaining everything, why not try to smile. Tomorrow is another day.
文章条理清晰,观点明确,语言比较流畅文章结构合理,层次清晰,句间连接成分使用较好, 能够使用较复杂的语法结构。 只是个别句子还不够简洁,今后应注意锤炼句子.
满分25分,如果书写工整,此文可得22分。
最终答案:略