请大家看看这篇英语文章,是套用模板的,可是感觉有些地方衔接的不太好,希望大家提出来,

请大家看看这篇英语文章,是套用模板的,可是感觉有些地方衔接的不太好,希望大家提出来,
It is generally believed that love is a hot topic which is most discussed by people not only in China but also all over the world as well.We live in different countries,speak different languages,but love is something common to us all.But how to show love may be different with different people in different countries.This is something we should give more thought to.
As is vividly depicted in the picture ,in the darkness happily stands a oil lamp,spreading brightness around itself.We are informed that love is just like a lamp,being brighter in darker places.Given its profound social implication,the thought-provoking phenomenon is well worth our endeavor to explore.People in darker places need more light than ordinary people.Maybe even a dim light can give them much hope for a better life and progress.Maybe even a dim light can give them much hope for a better life and progress.Maybe just a thread of light will call forth their strength and courage to step out of their difficulties.I think we all should be like a lamp in a dark place,showing our love,giving our help to others,even to strangers.
Only in a reasonable ,prosperous and healthy atmosphere can we hope to witness the ideal scene in which people can enjoy their life to the uttermost.

1. 第一句话 as well 删去
2.第二句speak=speaking, 还要把语言的S去掉,不然你就在不同和语言之间加个kinds of
3. 爱对于我们,的我们,改成all of us
4.也许.不同地方不同人不同国家这里的may be different 改 may be in different ways
5.第一段最后一句, 不能用this以后注意了,That is what we should give more attention on.
6.As is= As it is
7. 在in the darkness 前面加个which
8,. peple in darer place.后面的ordinary people改成 people in bright place 前后要对应.
9.even to strangers 和others是重复的,一个意思,建议改成 even someone you never met before.
全部更正完毕.