作业帮高一英语作文评语(2)
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高一英语作文评语(2)
您好,请帮忙看一下这篇作文,请多写些评语（因为我要到礼堂给全年级去讲评我自己的作文）,谢谢
Dear Q12,
Hi! I am one of the students chosen to solve the problem, and I want to tell you what is love and friendship and how we feel and think. What is love? All in all, where there is no cruelty, there is a beautiful world. Everyone always give others a hand each other. I also think everyone don’t like that there are too many churchyards everywhere. If you stay there a moment, and watch the insects flying in the warm summer air , and listen to the soft wind breathing through the grass , you will understand how quietly they rest , the sleepers in that quiet earth. If you want to know more about love , you can read the《WUTHERING HEIGHTS》, and woman named Amity Ballonet who was born and live in the north of England , is also the place where 《WUTHERING HEIGHTS》 happened . And the friendship is a thing that everyone wants to have, especially men. For the friendship , even you can lose life. For the friendship, even you can lose everything . It belongs to a spirit which every men can uphold it.
In a word , world need love , and the world also need friendship. Please imagine it a second , everyone helps each other , we live each other happily in the world . That’s a haven of peace , is a ideal society.
您好,请帮忙看一下这篇作文,请多写些评语（因为我要到礼堂给全年级去讲评我自己的作文）,谢谢
Dear Q12,
Hi! I am one of the students chosen to solve the problem, and I want to tell you what is love and friendship and how we feel and think. What is love? All in all, where there is no cruelty, there is a beautiful world. Everyone always give others a hand each other. I also think everyone don’t like that there are too many churchyards everywhere. If you stay there a moment, and watch the insects flying in the warm summer air , and listen to the soft wind breathing through the grass , you will understand how quietly they rest , the sleepers in that quiet earth. If you want to know more about love , you can read the《WUTHERING HEIGHTS》, and woman named Amity Ballonet who was born and live in the north of England , is also the place where 《WUTHERING HEIGHTS》 happened . And the friendship is a thing that everyone wants to have, especially men. For the friendship , even you can lose life. For the friendship, even you can lose everything . It belongs to a spirit which every men can uphold it.
In a word , world need love , and the world also need friendship. Please imagine it a second , everyone helps each other , we live each other happily in the world . That’s a haven of peace , is a ideal society.
Dear Q12,
Hi!I am one of the students chosen to solve the problem,and I want to tell you what is love and friendship and how we feel and think.
hi是不是应该改成 hello,everyone,毕竟你是面对很多同学说的.
what is改为what are
think后面应该跟 about them
What is love?All in all,where there is no cruelty,there is a beautiful world.Everyone always give others a hand each other.I also think everyone don’t like that there are too many churchyards everywhere.
where there is no cruelty,there is a beautiful world这句话你想表达什么意思
改为 if there was no cruelty,it would be a beautiful world.
Everyone always give others a hand each other.
改为everyone gives his hand to another.
I also think everyone don’t like that there are too many churchyards everywhere.
我没看懂
If you stay there a moment,and watch the insects flying in the warm summer air ,and listen to the soft wind breathing through the grass ,you will understand how quietly they rest ,the sleepers in that quiet earth.
stay a moment改为 stay for a moment.
breathing改为breezing
the sleepers in that quiet earth.是什么,你指grass吗?
If you want to know more about love ,you can read the《WUTHERING HEIGHTS》,and woman named Amity Ballonet who was born and live in the north of England ,is also the place where 《WUTHERING HEIGHTS》 happened .
去掉书名号,英语里没有书名号.
and woman named 改为 and the woman named
live改为lived
is also the place划去.
And the friendship is a thing that everyone wants to have,especially men.For the friendship ,even you can lose life.For the friendship,even you can lose everything .
even you can lose life 改为 you can even lose your life.后面同理.但把everying改为anything.
It belongs to a spirit which every men can uphold it.
In a word ,world need love ,and the world also need friendship.Please imagine it a second ,everyone helps each other ,we live each other happily in the world .That’s a haven of peace ,is a ideal society.
world need love改为the world.
need改为needs
唉,难改啊.建议你重写吧
中文思维太明显了.
Hi!I am one of the students chosen to solve the problem,and I want to tell you what is love and friendship and how we feel and think.
hi是不是应该改成 hello,everyone,毕竟你是面对很多同学说的.
what is改为what are
think后面应该跟 about them
What is love?All in all,where there is no cruelty,there is a beautiful world.Everyone always give others a hand each other.I also think everyone don’t like that there are too many churchyards everywhere.
where there is no cruelty,there is a beautiful world这句话你想表达什么意思
改为 if there was no cruelty,it would be a beautiful world.
Everyone always give others a hand each other.
改为everyone gives his hand to another.
I also think everyone don’t like that there are too many churchyards everywhere.
我没看懂
If you stay there a moment,and watch the insects flying in the warm summer air ,and listen to the soft wind breathing through the grass ,you will understand how quietly they rest ,the sleepers in that quiet earth.
stay a moment改为 stay for a moment.
breathing改为breezing
the sleepers in that quiet earth.是什么,你指grass吗?
If you want to know more about love ,you can read the《WUTHERING HEIGHTS》,and woman named Amity Ballonet who was born and live in the north of England ,is also the place where 《WUTHERING HEIGHTS》 happened .
去掉书名号,英语里没有书名号.
and woman named 改为 and the woman named
live改为lived
is also the place划去.
And the friendship is a thing that everyone wants to have,especially men.For the friendship ,even you can lose life.For the friendship,even you can lose everything .
even you can lose life 改为 you can even lose your life.后面同理.但把everying改为anything.
It belongs to a spirit which every men can uphold it.
In a word ,world need love ,and the world also need friendship.Please imagine it a second ,everyone helps each other ,we live each other happily in the world .That’s a haven of peace ,is a ideal society.
world need love改为the world.
need改为needs
唉,难改啊.建议你重写吧
中文思维太明显了.