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英语作文润色.建议适当增加些复杂句的使用;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;副词使用偏多

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英语作文润色.建议适当增加些复杂句的使用;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;副词使用偏多
Each of us has their own dreams.Like a dream on the wings of the people in the birds.
I have a dream from the first time I sit in a car--I dream to drive.As far as we know,Driving is the most meaningful way to meet human being's desire of "faster ".What's more,driving can take me to any place I want whether it rains,snows,blows or not.In addition,A smooth ride in a good car is enjoyable.With rows of trees moving backward rapidly,music played,breeze blowing,my soul flies in the air,therefore,I love this feeling very much.To my delight,If there is an opportunity,I will learn the driving this winter vacation.
Let us dream together with actions to make life better it.If winter comes,can spring be far behind.
修改如下:
Each of us has their own dreams,like a dream on the wings of the people in the birds.
I have a dream from the first time I sit in a car--I dream to drive.As far as we know,driving is the most meaningful way to meet human being's desire for"faster ".What's more,driving can take me to any place I want whether it rains,snows,blows or not.In addition,A smooth ride in a nice car is enjoyable.With rows of trees moving backward rapidly,music played,breeze blowing,my soul flies in the air,therefore,I love this feeling very much.To my delight,If there is an opportunity,I will learn the driving this winter vacation.
Let us dream together with actions to make life better it and hold on it.If winter comes,can spring be far behind.
再问: 貌似还是说有这个问题:上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。。。麻烦再改一下吧。。谢谢啦O(∩_∩)O
再答: 您好,我觉得整片文章读起来其实挺不错的,有英语四级的水平了。那你觉得哪里应该更改一下呢,或许这样我更能方便帮助您。(*^__^*) ……
再问: 不是我这么说的,我也看不出什么来,可是软件评改就是那么显示的。。所以。。想找你帮帮忙O(∩_∩)O