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老师: 您好!这是师达中学期末考题,请老师批改我的作文,并提供一些范文好吗? 多谢! 请根据你的周末家规,写出以下内容: 1. 简述你在周末的几条主要家规, 2. 叙述上个周末{在遵守家规的基础上}你是如何度过的。 3. 写出上个周末你所做的事情或活动的心情及感受,包括你对家规的看法或观点 要求:1.参考所给信息,自己安排周末活动,注意合理发挥; 2.条理清楚,语意连贯,字迹工整。 3.字数70—80. My family rules on weekends 1.Get up by 8:00 am. 2.Do some housework and finish the homework on Saturday. 3.Be back home by 7:00 on Sunday evening. 4.Be in bed by 9:00 on Sunday evening. Last weekend , I had a busy and tired weekend . I had to get up by 8:00 am. Then I had breakfast on Saturday It was delisious. I stayed at home . Because I had to do some housework and finish the homework on Saturday.So I helped my mom clean the house and washed my clothes .I was very tired.And then I did my homework . It was kind of difficult . So I didn’t really happy . On Sunday , I went to play games with my friend .We played tennis all morning . Then I visited my grandmother with my mom . Ihope her is in good health . In the evening I had to back home by 7:00 .After dinner ,I watched TU.Then I had to be in bed by 9:00.So I didn4 really happy. What a busy and tired weekend! 请您评一下分,总分10分,并请您批一下! 我这个有些少字规及观点,少活动中的感受,请您认真改一下! 谢谢!
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My family rules on weekends
On weekends I have some family rules in my family. I have to get up at early in the morning.I have to do house and homework on Saturday.I can't go back home late and I must go to bed by 9:00 on Sunday evening.So I am always very busy on weekends .
Last weekend , I had a busy and tired weekend . I got up at 8:00 am on Saturday . Then I had breakfast . It was delisious. I stayed at home because I had to do some housework and finish the homework on Saturday.So I helped my mom clean the house and washed my clothes .I was very tired.And then I did my homework . It was kind of difficult . So I wasn’t really happy .
On Sunday , I went to play games with my friend .We played tennis all morning . Then I visited my grandmother with my mom . I hope she is in good health . In the evening I had to go back home by 7:00 .After dinner ,I watched TV.Then I went to bed by 9:00.So I didn't feel really happy.
What a busy and tired weekend!
基本完成题目要求的内容,语言也比较流畅。从题意来看,在叙述上个周末的活动时,要全部使用一般过去时,这点做的很好,但是因为是对过去事情的叙述,所以最好不要过多使用had to 。自己的感受可以用一句话两句话来总结一下,这点做的很好。只不过对于题目要求的第一条,应该用一般现在时总体概括一下,这样不但能完成题目要求,而且也能使字数达到要求。
满分10分的话,此文可得7分。
下次评改作文最好投入作文评改专栏 ,谢谢合作!
最终答案:略