求修改英语作文About mathI admit that my math is weak,sometimes I ev

求修改英语作文
About math
I admit that my math is weak,sometimes I even wanted to give up it to study music,it means my goal is a musical collage.Because of my parents' hope,I raised my head to face math again and again.
Though I wanted to improve my math,everything never went on like what I wanted.Now I'm a new senior high school student,I just find that the math is too difficult to learn.What is worse is that I have got zero on the first text!That hurt me a lot!Everytime I went over the notes that I took them in the day I felt quite embarrassed because I could not understand it.This week,when Mr Li said that he would text me this Wednesday I trembled.I didn't want to get zero again!So I was careful with that text and I reviewed math notes until the middle night...I asked my dad for help even if he had a bad temper.
Today,I have got my grade------60!I passed the text!I improved!And much to my suprisement,I am the only one who passed the text Although the grade is not so high and my classmates are very clever(I am in a Experimental Class)!
I find back my confidence on math,I feel so happy!That is all about my striving and a will called I want to understand it very much.So I realised that I strived ,I gained,I joyed,i strived,i gained...It is a recycle procedure,the most important is that i must strive.
This event is symbolic in my new senior high school life.I think I should not afraid of math and try loving it.
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About math(s)
I admit that my math(s) is weak,sometimes I even wanted to (give up it 次序掉乱了应是:give it up) to study music,it means my goal is a musical collage.Because of my parents' (hope 改为 wishes),I raised my head to face math(s) again and again.
Though I wanted to improve my math(s),everything never went on like what I wanted.Now I'm a new senior high school student,I just find that the math9s) is too difficult to learn.(What is worse is 改为 The worst thing was) that I have got (加 a) zero on the first (text 你的意思是 test )!That hurt me a lot!Everytime I went over the notes that I took them in the day I felt quite embarrassed because I could not understand it.This week,when Mr Li said that he would (text 是 test) me this Wednesday I trembled.I didn't want to get (加 a) zero again!So I was careful with that text (test) and I reviewed (加 the) math notes until (去掉the) middle night...I asked my dad for help even if he (had 是 has) a bad temper.
Today,I have got my grade------60!I passed the text (test)!I (加 have) improved!And much to my (suprisement 是 surprises),I (am 过去式用 was) I the only one who passed the text (test).Although the grade is not so high and my classmates are very clever(I am in (a 用 an) Experimental Class)!
I (find back 改为 regained) my confidence on math(s),I feel so happy!That is all about my striving and a will called "I want to understand it very much".So I realised that I strived ,I gained,I joyed,i strived,i gained...It is a (recycle 改为 cycle of) procedure,the most important (加 thing) is that i must strive.
This event is symbolic in my new senior high school life.I think I should not afraid of math(s) and try loving it.
替你更正了,
再问： Because of my parents' (hope 改为 wishes),I raised my head to face math(s) again and again. 请问为什么要将hope 改为 wishes？ 谢谢
再答： 因为 hope 是希望，wishes 是愿望。 英语全都是用 wishes 的。