高中英语作文修改 A boy who had left his home for years

高中英语作文修改 A boy who had left his home for years
高中英语作文修改
 
  A boy who had left his home for years because of a family quarrel set his parents a letter that tie a white ribbon on tree if they welcome him back.Finally he saw hinders of white ribbons which showed his parents' welcome.
    After reading this story, I feel the whole-hearted love of the boy's parents,which makes me deeply moved.Child is a treasure in parents' eyes.parents can tolerate all child's mistakes but can not lose their child,thus how could we child hurt our parents?
    Many days ago,I unintentionally noticed a news that a 63 years old American father helps his handicapped son finsihing global travel. At first I was confused how could an old father manage such an impossible work.However I knew the answer from the father's firm eyes,which likes telling me"for father's love,everything is possible".
    As we all know"Father love to be hill",Indeed father's love likes a mountain--deep and silent.Although father seldom speaks his love out, he always there when we need him.He likes a harbor when coming the storm,likes a handkerchief when weeping, likes a map when losing the way. He is our guardian angel.
     Love our parents.Don't forget they already growing old while we too busy growing up.
 
 
1.是第二部分写作任务的
2.我是高三党,这25分作文一般只能得16分左右,帮帮挑一下语病还有提示一下该在哪方面提高吧.
3.宾语从句中的that能省略调吗?
 

A boy who left home for years because his parents had quarrel and he left a letter says that I will come home if there is a white ribbon tied on the tree.Years past by,(maybe days past by?)there was a white ribbon tied on the tree and so the boy is home.
After reading this story,I felt the whole-hearted love of the boy’s parents,which makes me deeply moved?.Every child is a treasure in parent’s eyes; they easily forgive their child and can never lose them.Thus how could we hurt our parents?
Many days ago,I unintentionally noticed news that a 63 years old American father helped his handicapped son finished global travel.at the begining I was confused how could an old father manage such impossible work,but the father’s firm?eyes have told me that a father’s love makes everything possible.
As we know,Father’s love is like hill,indeed it’s more like a mountain- deep and silent.Even though father rarely talks about love,but he will be there when we needed.Fathers are like a harbor when storm coming;a handkerchief when we cry; a map when we got lost.He is our guardian angel.
Please love your parents because they are getting older while you are too busy growing up.