作业帮请帮忙看一下是否存在语病
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请帮忙看一下是否存在语病
The main reason is that,as cooked in a short time,fast food has little nutrition in it,and it contains a great deal of fat and salt which can cause high blood pressure.
The main reason is that,as cooked in a short time,fast food has little nutrition in it,and it contains a great deal of fat and salt which can cause high blood pressure.
翻译过来是
主要原因是由于烹饪时间短,快餐几乎没有营养,并且含有大量的可以导致高血压的脂肪和盐.
语病 1.cooked in a short time,和后面的半句似乎不构成因果,因为微波食品烹饪时间也很短但不代表没有营养,高脂肪和盐.造成高脂肪和盐的原因应该是油炸和烤制.
2.and it contains 里的 it 多余,因为并列的2句公用一个主语 fast food
3.由于是 非限定性定语从句,是不是 which 前面应该加逗号?
主要语法错误就是 it 多余 和 which 前面应该加逗号
所以建议修改成
The main reason is that,as deep fried or grilled in a short time,fast food has little nutrition in it,and contains a great deal of fat and salt,which can cause high blood pressure.
主要原因是由于烹饪时间短,快餐几乎没有营养,并且含有大量的可以导致高血压的脂肪和盐.
语病 1.cooked in a short time,和后面的半句似乎不构成因果,因为微波食品烹饪时间也很短但不代表没有营养,高脂肪和盐.造成高脂肪和盐的原因应该是油炸和烤制.
2.and it contains 里的 it 多余,因为并列的2句公用一个主语 fast food
3.由于是 非限定性定语从句,是不是 which 前面应该加逗号?
主要语法错误就是 it 多余 和 which 前面应该加逗号
所以建议修改成
The main reason is that,as deep fried or grilled in a short time,fast food has little nutrition in it,and contains a great deal of fat and salt,which can cause high blood pressure.