作业帮书面表达2(作文评改)
来源：学生作业帮 编辑：作业帮 分类：英语作业 时间：2024/05/06 00:18:25
假如你叫李想，一名高三学生，面对高考的压力，想和父母说说心里话，请你用英语在你的博客上用书信形式表达出来，主要内容如下： 知心话：感恩1.多交流，使自己保持良好的状态 2创造条件，给自己提供适时的帮助 未来打算：考生自拟（至少写三条） 总分30 词数要求120左右！ Dear mum and dad, This is the turn of my life .On this special occasion ,how I wish I could have a heart-to-heart talk with you. I'm very grate for your caring and encouraging all the time.You devote all your love to me .Now ,I want to say:"Thank you very much ,dear mum and dad .Without you ,without me .I love you,too." College entrance exam is coming . I hope I can talking with you much ,and keep myself on good sipirit.I hope you can give a hand to me when I am in trouble .As unknown is furture ,I‘ll do my best to prepare my exam.I'll work harder in college ,and bacause more indepengt .Believe me ,I'll do the best . I'm quite confident of my furture life and I do wish you good health and a happy life . Yours ever, Li Xiang 请打分，并详改，谢谢！
解题思路： 作文评改
解题过程：
Dear mum and dad, This is the turn of my life .On this special occasion ,how I wish I could have a heart-to-heart talk with you.
I'm very grateful for your caring and encouraging all the time.You devote all your love to me .Now ,I want to say:"Thank you very much ,dear mum and dad .Without you ,without me .I love you,too."
College entrance exam is coming . I hope I can talking with you much ,in order that I can keep on good sipirit.I hope you can give me a hand when I am in trouble .As unknown is furture ,I'll do my best to prepare for my exam.I'll work harder in college ,and bacause more indepengt (这里要表达的是什么意思呢？）建议改成：and I will become more independent in college.Believe me ,I'll be the best .
I'm quite confident of my furture life and I do wish you good health and a happy life .
Yours ever,
Li Xiang
整篇文章谋篇布局合理，能够较为熟练的使用高中阶段使用的句型和短语。没有大的影响整体的错误。只存在少数短语的错误，另外个别句子不太符合英语的表达习惯。
你需要多总结范文里的好的句型和短语，这样能得到更大的提高。
按照30分算的话，可以给21分到23分。
最终答案：略
解题过程：
Dear mum and dad, This is the turn of my life .On this special occasion ,how I wish I could have a heart-to-heart talk with you.
I'm very grateful for your caring and encouraging all the time.You devote all your love to me .Now ,I want to say:"Thank you very much ,dear mum and dad .Without you ,without me .I love you,too."
College entrance exam is coming . I hope I can talking with you much ,in order that I can keep on good sipirit.I hope you can give me a hand when I am in trouble .As unknown is furture ,I'll do my best to prepare for my exam.I'll work harder in college ,and bacause more indepengt (这里要表达的是什么意思呢？）建议改成：and I will become more independent in college.Believe me ,I'll be the best .
I'm quite confident of my furture life and I do wish you good health and a happy life .
Yours ever,
Li Xiang
整篇文章谋篇布局合理，能够较为熟练的使用高中阶段使用的句型和短语。没有大的影响整体的错误。只存在少数短语的错误，另外个别句子不太符合英语的表达习惯。
你需要多总结范文里的好的句型和短语，这样能得到更大的提高。
按照30分算的话，可以给21分到23分。
最终答案：略