作业帮请英语大神帮忙看一下下面这段文章有没有错误……谢
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请英语大神帮忙看一下下面这段文章有没有错误……谢
Crisis is a scary thing,but it
also is a common thing,everyone can’t avoid crisis in her life.It can happen
at any time.Nobody like crisis,but sometimes crisis is a good thing,it can
tell us a lot of principle just because crisis is a kind of warning to
ourselves.
I still can remember the terrible
experience in my 7 years old……
At a day in the summer,a
cloudy day,there is no sunshine but the air was still very hot.My parents took
my brother and me to Beidaihe to go swimming.
I can’t swim at that time,
but the weather was too hot and the water looks so cool.“I wanna go swimming,
the weather is too hot!” I said to my mum.She was agree but she ask me to
follow my brother and don’t swim to deep water area.I said “okey!”
The water was so cool!My leg
was covered by water and I feel so comfortable,though I can’t make water cover
my whole body like my swimming brother.A few minutes later,my brother said “let
me take you to the water that is deeper!” “I’d like to,bu……but I can’t,I can’t
swim!” I said.“It doesn’t matter,I can help you and there was more fun and
cooler!” I hesitated,I really want to go,but my mother has told me don’t do
that.………Ah……Finally,my curiosity defeated my mother’s word.I said “Okey,let’s
go!”
So I go to the deep water
area carefully,the water covered my chest gradually and I felt cooler!I was
so excited and I walked in water faster.Suddenly,something caused me to
stumble,I fell down into the water!Too bad,I thought.I tried my best to
make my head drill out the water,but I couldn’t use my power,I didn’t know
what should I do……I just could feel helpless ,hopeless and regret,I regretted
I didn’t allow my mum’s word.
My whole body submerged in the
water,I couldn’t breathe and I felt I was losing my power
At that moment,my brother found
I was lost,he clutched me and took me out of the water.I breathed deeply,I was
safe now.
I was safe now,I had get rid
of crisis,but crisis had told me something:You shouldn’t do the thing that
you have known it is dangerous,do not be controlled by curiosity forever……
Now I know,crisis is a teacher,
it can teach you a lot of principle,I’m sure sometimes it is a good thing though
I don’t hope to meet it.
Crisis is a scary thing,but it
also is a common thing,everyone can’t avoid crisis in her life.It can happen
at any time.Nobody like crisis,but sometimes crisis is a good thing,it can
tell us a lot of principle just because crisis is a kind of warning to
ourselves.
I still can remember the terrible
experience in my 7 years old……
At a day in the summer,a
cloudy day,there is no sunshine but the air was still very hot.My parents took
my brother and me to Beidaihe to go swimming.
I can’t swim at that time,
but the weather was too hot and the water looks so cool.“I wanna go swimming,
the weather is too hot!” I said to my mum.She was agree but she ask me to
follow my brother and don’t swim to deep water area.I said “okey!”
The water was so cool!My leg
was covered by water and I feel so comfortable,though I can’t make water cover
my whole body like my swimming brother.A few minutes later,my brother said “let
me take you to the water that is deeper!” “I’d like to,bu……but I can’t,I can’t
swim!” I said.“It doesn’t matter,I can help you and there was more fun and
cooler!” I hesitated,I really want to go,but my mother has told me don’t do
that.………Ah……Finally,my curiosity defeated my mother’s word.I said “Okey,let’s
go!”
So I go to the deep water
area carefully,the water covered my chest gradually and I felt cooler!I was
so excited and I walked in water faster.Suddenly,something caused me to
stumble,I fell down into the water!Too bad,I thought.I tried my best to
make my head drill out the water,but I couldn’t use my power,I didn’t know
what should I do……I just could feel helpless ,hopeless and regret,I regretted
I didn’t allow my mum’s word.
My whole body submerged in the
water,I couldn’t breathe and I felt I was losing my power
At that moment,my brother found
I was lost,he clutched me and took me out of the water.I breathed deeply,I was
safe now.
I was safe now,I had get rid
of crisis,but crisis had told me something:You shouldn’t do the thing that
you have known it is dangerous,do not be controlled by curiosity forever……
Now I know,crisis is a teacher,
it can teach you a lot of principle,I’m sure sometimes it is a good thing though
I don’t hope to meet it.
语法先暂且不提,你要多注意三单和时态啊.还有这句“I regretted
I didn’t allow my mum’s word.”,“allow”是“允许、承认”的意思,应该换成“follow”
I didn’t allow my mum’s word.”,“allow”是“允许、承认”的意思,应该换成“follow”