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请问这句话有没有语法问题,my current goal is to be involved in an interna

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请问这句话有没有语法问题,my current goal is to be involved in an international company
改成这样了,帮看看后面的还有什么问题吗?My current goal is to join in an international company in finance field which could provide me with a high platform to develop myself and bring me a broad view.(想表达的意思要是提供一个高平台,开阔的视野)
原句,to be involved.不是很恰当.
改句,It 's a run-on sentence.
应该 Keep the sentence neat and sweet!
My goal is to join the finance field of an international company,which can help broaden my view.
Why?
The word "current" is not necessary.When you are making your present statement,without a doubt it would be current.So the word current is an extra because It is not important here.
"join" and "join in " would mean the same.
"in an international company in finance field" Try to use different words to make your reader excited.not "in.in."
It' also hard to understand.we want to use ".of."
"develop myself" is an unclear statement.